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🕑 Added 2025-07-27 14:44:02 +0000 UTCI am very sorry for those who are dissatisfied with my writing of ned stark this chapter.
Your criticism is not harsh. You have seen the flaws in my writing and have shown i need to do it better. This is not the quality of writing worth your support. I apologise once more.
I did not want to rush the story towards an end and sometimes have to dumb down or make some illogical choices where characters are concerned, (As in filler chapters) as well as writing, six or 5k words chapters and having them ready by days end perhaps makes my work unappealing to the reader than me when i read it.
Yes, the logical choice should be ned runs off to jon but I did not make him do that which was a stupid writing mistake and a disservice to you as readers and supporters
From now on i will remove such mistakes for the sake of drama and plot and write it from a logical standpoint of what a person with godlike power and mindset that is barely hanging onto humanity will act like when provoked.
I humby ask your forgiveness once more.
From the next chapter, the power of the elden lord will be shown. I ask for your patience, please.
Comments
Captain Hair
I thought the chapter went fine, but I naturally fall into the assumption that Ned's hopelessly indecisive when Jon is involved. Caitlyn putting her foot down is probably the only way Ned would have actually gone to Jon. Although, I could see Arya and Robb going behind Ned to speak to Jon themselves.
Ben
Tbh it feels like it fell between the cracks. Like it works if you show the Ned isnt thinking as clearly as he should or if retreating into thinking about politics to avoid his grief. What you wrote is plausible and justifiable, you just didn't show the reasons WHY Ned is acting like that. Hell even showing that Ned fears that Bran will have to suffer and die like Jon did, showing that Ned believes that is the cost of their magic would make it more poignant. The chapter is well written it just needs some parts expanded on to make what you wrote fit the characters you have portrayed.
