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Trap Online Chapter 65: Interview

🕑 Added 2020-12-10 01:40:31 +0000 UTC

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Grangel

Good chapter!!! Don't forget what Viccy wanted to talk to Rick about concerning his statement in game about the controlling people...

Grangel

"Together Victoria and I went back into the apartment without knowing holding hands." should be 'Together Victoria and I went back into the apartment, without knowing it, holding hands.'

Grangel

"These are my terms, and if you need to go on vacation or have an emergency, please bring it up or email us so that we can find it with ease." end of sentence doesn't sound right...

Grangel

"Gabby, the masseuse, leaves the house and all the time. " no 'and' here..

Grangel

"Bad food or rationed food will make people feel down and perform." unfinished thought here...

Grangel

"Thoughtful Security Guard, I thought as he put it on service for us." this sentence needs more to it for a complete description

Grangel

|""Maybe later..." I replied, earning making her smile even larger as the elevator doors opened to the lobby.' either remove 'earning' or remove 'making' and fix the sentence

Madjic

Things will start to pick up after this chapter...


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