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Trap Online Chapter 86: Early Exit

🕑 Added 2021-04-13 05:05:53 +0000 UTC

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Grangel

Actually after rereading it there was only one place that was truly repetitive maybe it just needs rewording (the rest is RIck mentioning the phantom feeling 2 or 3 times which makes sense and bringing up things to both Li and Gabby so that makes sense since he is talking to them individually)... "I stepped out, and the sun was shining in through the windows. I looked at the time and noticed that I left about three hours early. I didn't realize how long I was in the clutches of Vinar while I was forced to have that orgasm. I still genuinely don't recognize how long I was in his clutches.".. I think this can be fixed by wording...

Grangel

Great chapter!!! I like the IRL conversations and the feelings behind them but there are a few spots where it either sounds repetitive or actually is repetitive. I am always wondering about Li and Gabby and their personal lives... I wonder if they would be interested in getting involved with Rick and/or Victoria in a relationship... in game is for all intensive purposed a harem of woman/futanari) (who not only do things with the succubus but also with each other) centered around Rick's succubus... who says out of game can't be a harem of woman (who are also open to do things with each other if they want) centered around Rick... I remember Li having a bad experience with her last employer and a relationship even if it didn't exist... I don't remember anything about Gabby and her past relationships...

Madjic

Let me know what you think of this chapter. I would love feedback on it since I am questioning the interaction's feeling. Thanks!


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