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Unfair-Chapter 107: Ivy's Tale

🕑 Added 2022-10-08 12:57:32 +0000 UTC

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Thank you.

I edited it but it didn’t go through apparently… Wow…I feel like it shows how messed up Ivy really is. And that she still caught too much of the video from daycare regardless. Such a “ fairytale” or “utopia” she knew perfectly. Or almost too perfectly. Ivy still doesn’t get Clark’s situation and I don’t think she has the capability to do she especially now hearing that story. Great job!

Loke?

Wow…I feel like it shows how messed up Ivy really is. And that she still caught too much of the video from daycare regardless. Such a “ fairytale” or “utopia” she knew perfectly. Or almost too perfectly. Ivy still doesn’t get Clark’s situation and I don’t think she has the capability to do she especially now hearing that story. Great job!

Coincidentally Aibii and Ivy sound very similar to the untrained ear and mean roughly the same thing. The difference between a “b” and a “v” So she was named the yamatoan word for it, and coincidentally Mrs. B mispronounced it and it was close enough. It’s like a kid changing their name from Juan to John after moving. Americanizing as it were.

Question- was she named the yamatoan term for ivy bc of “growing and growing” as she says early in the story or bc ms b misbeard her name as Ivy, as she says at the end? Or maybe the Ms B event and her decision to go by Ivy just got interwoven into the first half of the story after many bedtime recounts of the tale with her mom so that it all came together?

Yup. Literally a foreign concept to her.

This also explains why Ivy desperately wants to befriend Clark. She finds the idea of a grown up Little completely fascinating.

Those are some very good questions. Ones that I hope to answer in later installments.

Define true.

If I can make you say "Wow", I've done my job.

I'm really glad you enjoyed it and appreciate your praise! This comment and a few others really got me thinking, so I wanna reply to it. Not that anyone has said anything "wrong", but this part is a passion of mine right now. So...infodump ahead! The big thing I wanna mention is that just as our real world has multiple creation myths, legends, beliefs, religions, historical accounts, ethical philosophies, laws etc. etc. etc. so too did I want to bring that to other stories. So what you just read was ONE (fictional) culture's beliefs, mythology, and mythological history. One told through the lens of a simple childlike edition with little ethical or theological examination. The equivalent of a children's Bible story instead of theology, the story about George Washington and the cherry tree instead of a U.S. History book, or Aesop's Fables instead of Plato's Republic. An important part that got me going with Unfair is the idea of relationships, conflicting points of view, cultural and individual biases, and working off limited information either by accident or on purpose. And while I don't know know that I have any overarching morals or solutions or theses to share on these (Please see the opening of Huckleberry Finn), it was important to me that the fictional characters in this story have these elements strengths and flaws to their personalities. I didn't want Littles to be completely completely helpless, Amazons to be totally heartless, and Tweeners to be universally condescending bystanders. Instead I try to mix in several different and often contradictory personality elements to the characters; because that's how people are. We're a bunch of walking contradictions. So I'm not ever going to reveal and objective history of this world that Clark inhabits, because that's not the story Clark is trying to tell. The only thing this chapter is, canonically, is Ivy telling Clark a story that she believes to be true. A story, a belief system, and a way of thinking that she has had and "known to be true" for a very very long time.

That easily one of the most fun parts of this story. Making observations and preconceptions that are common in this genre and twisting them or challenging them.

Yeah, it was very important to me to try and tell it through 'Ivy's voice' so to speak.

Thank you, friend. It was very important to me to try and change the narrative tone and voice for this chapter in particular.

It's been fun holding onto this, but I'm glad to finally have it out.

Guilend

I’m just curious if the entire story was true or did Ivy’s mommy watered it down any.

I love the mythological style that you combined with how Ivy not only told her life story, but revealed that she's a Little through recessive genes... Love when stories dabble with Genetics! Also, I had a feeling from the start that Ivy was Mrs. Zoge's daughter. There's just been something so unique about their relationship compared to every other "mother/child" relationship in this story. It was subtly hinted at for the longest time. Now, I wonder if Clark will still use Ivy to get free... he knows she's obviously in love with him, but is he willing to give Ivy what the girl thinks she wants in exchange for a shot at freedom...?

I feel as if I say this a lot, but...wow. You say you've been saving this for a while, and I thoroughly believe it. This reads like a bedtime story that Zoge has been telling her *daughter* forever, and it is clearly having an impact on Clark. It does make perfect sense now that Ivy has Amazon strength, but his emotional non-response at the end may lead to his re-evaluating himself as well as her. Loved it! Thank you!

This was SUPER cool to read! I've been kinda curious how Littles, Tweens, and Bigs might fit together in that universe's theology, and it was really cool to see a glimpse of that. Other stories/authors have *touched* on e.g. church existing but not actually come up with one of the stories (only other one I can think of is the LittleFallenVerse Christmas story with the queen/king...but that's more like a fairy-tale story rather than e.g. something theological). So, it was awesome to see you take that extra step, elaborate more, and actually tie it in to the culture. And then to also tie it in to Ivy! I had my suspicions, but it was cool to see that expanded even a bit more -- was thinking that she was a stunted Tween but bringing in the recessive Little bit was kinda unexpected and cool. Makes me wonder if that's where Littles came from in that universe? But at the same time, I wonder why more Littles don't have her strength?

Great comment. A lot of good points.

One of the things I love about this story is how much the character's preconceptions are factored in. Clark spent his life trying to challenge how Amazons perceive Littles and now his preconceptions are being challenged.

I’ve been keeping this one in my back pocket forever. Thank you.

Jemsy

Last week I was wondering how Clark would feel about himself if he learned that Ivy was always Hana's biological daughter. He's framed his entire understanding of Ivy and Zoge on an assumption. Just the fact that Zoge is a Yamatoan Amazon, he assumed she was "typical" and constantly internally monologues that Ivy is Zoge's "pet" Little. For the longest time he's always just chalked up an Amazon loving a Little as some inherent instinct inside ALL Amazons to snatch up the closest Little at any given moment and brainwash them, especially Yamatoans! Now he realizes he's been mocking Ivy and Zoge's love, when they genuinely love each other unconditionally (Literally)! It seems like leaving her entire country for the sake of her child's health was a no-brainer decision for Hana. I wonder if Clark feels especially guilty now for not leaving something so trivial, by comparison, as a job to keep his wife safer. This one hit me in the feels and I love that it reads like a bed-time story! I love this chapter!

Djangosolarboy

Ivys story told by her almost like a verse from the Bible. Really well-done Personalias.

I loved this chapter! I love how the story has religious vibes but also what a refugee mother would tell her child to make sense of their situation. Poor Ivy she never had a chance! Once you are indoctrinated from birth of course you will believe in maturosis and Littles etc. It’s like how children will grow up believing their parents views regardless of ridiculous some of them may be. I’m guessing most of the beginning came from the Empress of Yamatoa. It sounds very religious ( angles and heaven), where the Empress was Gods vessel. It sounds like something she told the masses and gained followers. The end has a lot less rhetoric and sounds like what Zoge told Ivy to flee. Also the story goes from being about the Empress to Ivy. Since Ivy was telling this story without emotion or thought, you can tell she’s been told this so many times. She doesn’t have to think about it anymore. It’s just fact. This also shows that Clark has been a part of this story for a while. I wonder if he is Mister Gibson or Mister Grange I’m Ivys story. I wonder if he was Mister Gibson and then it changed to Grange once he was captured or if Zoge consistently call him Gibson since that’s who he was at the time. Many other thoughts but amazing chapter!

Based on comments from last week we basically figured this part out, that Ivy was a rare mutant Little of an Amazon and a Tweener (who also still has her amazon grip strength), but hearing about why they wanted/were forced to leave Yamatoa was the big revelation. It explains Ivy's literal damage here too, even if she didn't have much access to those "cartoons", they still probably had some small lasting effect, based on what we've seen with other Littles. A long awaited backstory well told.


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