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[Cafe] 68 – Catching the attention of the mighty

🕑 Added 2024-03-29 04:27:18 +0000 UTC

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Nieus The God Of Magic

Just take it as food for thought but don't let anything stop you from writing the story you wish to write

Unholy_Student

Noted

Nieus The God Of Magic

Not a bad chapter but the info dump could've been done more smoothly and seamlessly if author-san started with the mc interacting with customers after his evolution, and then transitioning into the shockwaves his existence is causing (insert the info) to the supernatural community and then shifting to the supernatural/other group forces gearing up and planning counters to his existence

Unholy_Student

Ah, I see. I thought I did explain it, guess I skipped that part

jean

the story is great it just came out of left field with no build up or anything maybe talk in the chapter about when the tutorial was finished and zeref was getting stronger it send waves or something here it was like a cake smashed into your face and you didn't see it coming in any way the chapter and story is great just it felt like what the hell why explain this with no context sorry if im bad at explaining it friend :P

Unholy_Student

Hmmm. It was more to let the readers know that the supernatural world felt the 'arrival' aka, the MC completing the tutorial, though I can fix it if others don't like it

Unholy_Student

Eh, forgot. Must have not noticed, eh, oh well. Its fixed now

jean

well the first half of the chapter feels more like a info dump the rest is good the first half is more knowledge and is confusing why this jumped out of no where to just dumping the first half of the chapter in lore and knowledge that we really don't need to know yet or why its dumped on us out of the blue :P

Francisco Jimenez

Can we get wonder woman in elden ring

vividlearner744

Is that first paragraph ment to be there or did you forget to remove it?


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