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We Live In An MMO?! - Chapter 15 [EARLY ACCESS]

🕑 Added 2024-06-12 08:30:00 +0000 UTC

Comments

Tariko

Fantastic work!! I really liked all of the closeup shots of the sentries helmets, especially the one pov shot from their view, very cool! You could really get a feel for their thought processes

RandoWis

Alright, noted! Please don't feel gaslighted into thinking it's an issue on your reading! Now that you've pointed it out, I too can see what you mean! Thank you so much for the feedback and helping me improve! Moving forward, I'll be sure to try and illustrate actions clearer with these notes in mind!

Love4Chubbs

No problem. The lunge attack on page 12, it a pretty clear read onwards to pages 13 and 14 but page 15 I wasn't entirely sure if Lu completely stop the attack or there was still some forward motion going against the block. I do believe the motion on the hair and speed lines do indicate that but the blade itself seem still on impact. Page 20 the guard attacks at an angle from above, looking back on it a few times I see there was a change in perspective onwards to page 22 to show how close that attack was and how it was stopped but it almost looks like the distant between Lu and the guard had changed. Like I said pretty minor, I looked it over again and questioned if this is more of a misread on my part. Also the pages numbers I mention are how its been separated on here and not on the comic itself.

RandoWis

Hey there Love4Chubbs, thanks for the feedback! Do you mind telling me which parts exactly seemed off and why? I'd like to see where I can improve for future chapters if possible!

Love4Chubbs

Action packed and very nicely done, a minor gripe for me would be certain angles and impact seem a little off when looking at the next panel but nothing major still reads perfectly fine. Well worth the wait, I hope all is well and your recovering nicely.

ChoseBinne

30 hours without water or food? o.O I feel you are fighting as strongly as your characters do! <3 Great job, we love your work! (and you being healthy)