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Outrun - Chapter 151

🕑 Added 2024-10-01 22:04:01 +0000 UTC

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Gardor

You already established him being superstitious about the crow in the camera, so rustling wings and spooky birds seems like a good choice

Lost Rain

For real. Especially after the slight change to the chase scene.

Lost Rain

Whispering works

Gardor

Ya just to keep their relative positions coherent. Except she needs to speak out loud to Corvid...

Lost Rain

Huh, that’s weird. Where’d all these plot holes come from? I swear they weren’t there earlier T_T I’ll rewrite it. It’d make more sense if he heard the fluttering of wings or something else that freaked him out.

Gardor

Oh so not like, a robot or Corvid? She stopped following him, walked somewhere else, and then purposely made noise coming towards him? And then sneakily got behind him again, close enough to sneak through the door before he locks it? And then poses against the wall? Cuz this line means he turned around to lock the door: "His head fell forward, slapping the door as the cool sensation helped calm down" I'm not sure the choreography (?) or spatial positioning really works here. Oh! Maybe if closing and locking the door happened with a switch at his desk, that'd help. So he's not immediately turning around. But it'd help just the last bit. Edit: oh wait, she broke into the security room before he even got there? My bad. Still odd that she'd have the time or the physical routes through the building to do this. Even more important edit: I'm not sure if you're familiar with the "Baki walking behind" gif, but that's basically how it seems this went down.

Lost Rain

“I had to intentionally make noise to distract the guy just to beat him to the door. It was a close race too, especially when he started booking it like a jaeger was after him.” I knew I was forgetting something.

Gardor

Where'd the footsteps come from?

Mr. Bigglesworth

The Dark Demon: Abyss Crow, has struck again!


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