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Outrun - Chapter 172

🕑 Added 2024-11-15 23:04:00 +0000 UTC

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lenkite

What is the body count so far ? Feels utterly unrealistic with bullets, combat drones, rockets flying about for weeks ? and no one going to the afterlife.

Gardor

Yeah, imo it'll be weird to have him have a hero moment without a prior introduction. Again, I'm not a professional whiner. Just weird to have a relative stranger show up and be a badass.

Lost Rain

Ah, I see. He hasn't had a moment to shine quite yet... yeah, was going for a very busy-man type set-up where he doesn't shine till near the end like a boss. I had a description of him in the first chapter with Athena, but yeah, I could readd it somewhere.

Gardor

But it definitely does make the world seem more real, that the leader didn't drop everything to talk to a random tech girl. I just want a description of the man.

Gardor

No no, she's had a couple meetings with the captain. He told her to go into the city, and this conversation. However, he never had a "look at this bad ass in charge of the mercenary company" moment. All of her interactions with him are kind of... incidental?

Lost Rain

She just talked to the Captain face to face? Captain Roger is the leader of the Crimson Company. Captain Roger is also who she met with Athena. Though, to be fair, I have kept Shiro in the background quite a bit for the most part so far in this arc. I didn't want main character syndrome to kick in where Shiro solves all problems and all that, especially considering she is supposed to be out with super-competent PMCs who know what they're doing. Figured it might make the world feel more real. I might've gone a bit far with that concept. The next several parts will all be back to usual with MC being MC though.

Gardor

Alright, this is just drunk Garry talking, but I do think it's a little weird for the main character not to meet the captain. Or at least, describe him from afar. I understand it's probably my main character tunnel vision, that I assume she'd interact with the very busy important man. It's well written, but eventually you need to shine a spotlight on who the leader of this group is, imo.


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