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Outrun - Chapter 180

🕑 Added 2024-12-04 23:04:01 +0000 UTC

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Gardor

Great chapter, she's always sorta competent but it's nice to see her in her element. "Its movements caused subtle screeches as its rusted internals ground against each other." "The bots, uncaring in the slightest about their surroundings, continued marching through the sea of bones" "each movement caused subtle groans of metal." These quotes make me wonder how the bot at the reception desk snuck up on her. Well, that was my first thought regardless, but these quotes lend evidence to it being plot convenient instead of realistic. When she does tech things, like searching hard drives, is she completely dead to the real world? "they stalked up and down the aisles or cut through the countless rows of seats seemingly with a purpose." -> dunno why this reads funny to me, maybe "seemingly with purpose" would be better? Something about making it "a" purpose, singular, but then not defining it seems weird. Or it's the vagueness of "seemingly", whereas "a purpose" lends itself towards specificity. What do I know tho. Oh, also, when she opens the shutters and the robots congregate in front of them, isn't the squad basically right there? Did Lia wave to her, and are they having a tense stare down with unblinking robots right now?


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