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Outrun - Chapter 182

🕑 Added 2024-12-09 23:04:00 +0000 UTC

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Gardor

Please explain your insight comment.

Halycon404

Something is correct as she doesn't know what it is yet. The insight comes after the sound.

Gardor

"Thunder sounded in the air as something heavy moved across the floor. A flash of Insight hit me, feeling like chills wrapped around my entire body."->I'm even less of an authority on this complaint than usual, but I'm not sure you should use the singular "someTHING heavy" to describe the mass of snakes. However, I also don't know a less specific term to use, and I also don't know how to account for her not knowing what's making the sound, and making a guess based on what's she's hearing. Second part, these snakes don't seem like constrictors, so maybe insight should give her bite tingles. "On my way down, my Drop Chute flared, stopping my plummet to the ground from harming my body." -> how quickly does drop chute turn on? It turns on immediately after the apex of her jump? Did she like, mean for that to happen, and set up the program to activate, or is this just a normal thing the tech does? How high did she jump/ how high is the ceiling?

Eric

Nice horror scene


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