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Outrun - Chapter 140

🕑 Added 2024-09-06 22:04:01 +0000 UTC

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Lost Rain

Your drunken ramblings are more coherent than my sober ones ;;_;;

Gardor

Oh man please don't remind me that my drunken ramblings persist even after I've forgotten about them

Lost Rain

Okay, I know it’s a bit late, but I went and rewrote a few parts. What you said makes sense.

lenkite

Lets hope Corvid doesn't make her want to flick shiny things.

Gardor

Alright so I was thinking this upon reading, and I'm not sure how character accurate it is, but here goes: I feel like she should negotiate different prices for just investigating, and then for potentially sabotaging and/or leading an assault on the corp. Like, instead of her being on the hook for everything, be like "yeah I'll investigate for $2000, if it looks feasible you can pay me the rest". Whether or not this is in line with Shiro's character is also compounded by the fact she's scared shitless of this woman who just beat up 7 men and is sitting on a box of grenades, but when she agreed to it it didn't really seem like it was under duress. But if her, I dunno, internalized understanding of her own character makes her view herself as a tech focused private eye and thief, she should rebel against a fixer telling her to wage guerilla warfare, and then being held responsible if that personal crusade fails. At least mention that leading a strike team isn't really her specialty, the fixer hired her cuz she needed a softer touch (compared to everyone else the fixer knows) and their previous work experience was being hired to drive into the desert and see what was up. Speaking of "crusades", just uncovering something illegal and then using her cop connections seems like a pretty great way to fuck up a corporation's day, if it's bad enough they can't bribe their way out of it. And this doesn't seem like the biggest corp, if this is how they're acting. Not that she necessarily wants to thin the division between these two sections of her life, but she's already using the same name. Completely different topic, but I think it's kind of strange the tech tree has such a blatantly magical perk. Her tech sense is helped by her mana sense, so I guess there's a precedent. There isn't really as hard a separation as I'm used to, and I think that has the potential to be neat. Low budget technopathy.

Gardor

"Crow had yet to be let down" -> "be a let down" or "yet to let me down"

The3picPr0

Thanks for the chapter!


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