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Outrun - Chapter 142

🕑 Added 2024-09-11 22:04:01 +0000 UTC

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Gardor

Also she immediately recognized it as a sprite, and has run into sprites before, so there's clearly a process to summoning/befriending/taming sprites that every other magician goes through. Whether it's learning the correct runes for the summoning circle or leaving the correct ingredients out for the ritual, there is a method she could learn about.

Lost Rain

It’s a fairly minor change. Back when I first wrote the idea for Corvid a couple months back, I thought he’d be the only pet type. The change will add a bit more setup for if I want to do another.

Gardor

Oh wasn't trying to get ya to change it, just wanted her to think about it. I liked the introduction of her being surprised by the bird in her room, and I don't know how you can make that interaction make sense if she gets a primer in system space on what to expect. Still tho, it'd probably make more sense if there was a different process for imbuing this kind of perk into her, just so it's not always a surprise.

Lost Rain

For the nitpicking, I will deflect to good ole television. Dogs are in TV quite a bit. Also, dogs, cats, and other varied household pets aren’t extinct, though they are definitely more of a rich person’s thing more than anything. At least on the continent where Shiro lives. The other continents aren’t nearly as inhospitable. I did mention a bio engineered fox in like chapter eight or nine I think. I will go back and rewrite the Perk acquisition though. At the time I couldn’t think of how I wanted it to happen, but I’ve thought about it quite a bit more recently.

Gardor

Woo! Half the backstory, now we just need to learn how this random company we did a deep dive on relates to our MC! On to my traditional nitpicking, I don't really think of cyberpunk worlds as being "pet keeping" cultures. Just to raise the point that she should be really out of her depth when it comes to relating to a pet, and maybe some weird stuff happens that's contrary to what us pet having folks would expect. Can't remember if it was this story that mentioned the bespoke bio engineered pets, but I think that's something far enough outside her socio economic sphere that it should be beyond her frame of reference. All this to say, I'm not sure how familiar she'd be with the "who's a good boy" colloquialism directed at dogs. I figured she'd lean more towards awkward than anything. Another thing I think should happen is her reflecting on the different kind of perk "initialization" she went through this time. It wasn't the in depth time warped study session, and it wasn't the painful body modification; she just fell asleep and now there's a bird. Her thinking about the differences should be the first step in her figuring out her new perk, which I think a responsible person would do sooner rather than later. Although, this specific point might be even less objective than I usually fail to be, since I just want more details about the perk. Litrpg fanboy am I.


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