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Outrun - Chapter 222

🕑 Added 2025-03-12 22:04:01 +0000 UTC

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Gardor

I think there's some pov fuckery going on towards the end, you may wanna put a page break in to distinguish between the inquisitor pov and then the slightly removed inquisitor pov. Sorry, the actual terms escape me, but part of it is third person limited and you get some of the interior of the character, and then when he's walking through the battle it's more...clinical, maybe.

Findell

Dunno she hasnt had much more then a bullet hole or knife cut since she got it other then some cyberwear damage that also healed. But it probbaly wont regenerate a lost body part or her broken eye would have been fixed. Hopefully she gets a full set of regrown body parts from her treatment.

gedas

"A slight haze surrounded the down girl." Down->Downed

lenkite

Don't think [Quick Healing] fixes limbs right ? She needs a replacement bio hand grown.

Gardor

"Mid-move, I pulled a handful of knives and through them up" ->threw

gedas

"Just as they were about to reach the wall, a massive explosive tore through the space." Do you mean explosion?

Lost Rain

Thank you! It is fixed.

David Brims

Wow! The Inquisitor's ability is way more OP than I thought! Even friendly fire got appropriately redirected!

Findell

All squids, new location --- squids to squads

Alexander Belousov

Some sort of luck trait? An "Eidolon of Luck"? Something similar? Anyway. Satisfactory end to the fight and all.

Shiver Sheehan

Thanks for the chappy! The inquisitor has some nice fuckiness going on there. Loving his perspective.


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